Good story. My only questions is did anyone in the council oppose this or was it a unanimous approval?
Good story about the subdued Tigerfest. May have wanted a TUPD or BCPD source since security is mentioned, but that's just a nitpick. Good job.
I thought starting out with Obama was an interesting angle, but things started to get difficult to understand towards the middle of the article. The story is about illegal immigrants in the islands and Obama's vacation there. Then it turns to how people view it as a happy place but it's really not. That's my first problem. There's no source to say "things aren't happy as they seem." It sounds like the one who wrote this article is more pushing the envelope with their opinion. Stating that a car accident was the breaking point because of comments in a local newspaper is nice, but I want to see it myself or it's just an accusation. At least give the local paper's name or where you heard that information from. I do like that ... More »






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Towson University minor local news, written by the person who submitted the story to Newstrust.
Thanks for taking a look at my story. Any suggestions on how I could improve my writing, sir?